doscoff, I think that multiple story threads is fine. The threads do not seem to move from one to the other with a smooth transition. Your suggestions of rearranging the chapters seems to work well.
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Originally posted by Baron Munchausen:
- not reminisces of the already past story line!
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I do not mind the reminiscing. If it is tied, and necessary to something in the present story thread. Sometimes, that is very powerful way of story telling!
mlmbd 
