[CthulhuDreams]

Why do you want an awake pretender? Abyssia has good expanding troops at start. If you make him dormant you get him in time for good forging etc

With your proposed build you could add order 3 for 120 points giving you great income to build more mages AND boost his dominion. Personally I'd then take out one point of growth to take Luck 1 as well, because the events are significantly better if you have luck 1 over luck 0.

Edit: You don't really want fire or blood on your pretender either, as you have great options for that already.

Edit2: for example, you could get a dormant great druid with O2, P1, H3, G1, L1, M1 with A4, W2, E4, S2, D2 (or, your original magic line with E4 and +1 to another school)