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Originally Posted by Edi
This looks like it could be something really nice, I always love good stories. 
However, there's a slight problem: It makes my eyes bleed. I think the formatting would be much improved if each paragraph change had one full empty line before it, because while that would probably look very good on a word processor, the forum format is somewhat more limited. |
Sorry about the eye-bleedage. I've fixed it up for you, so it's a bit easier to read. MS Word's auto-line breaks didn't copy paste too well, but thanks to it's wonky interpretations of quotation marks and apostrophes, I've switched over to OpenOffice, so future installments should be more readable.
If you like this story, you also might want to check out
Hell is for Heroes, which was written by yours truly and may or may not be related to this one. Of course, the current version will probably make your eyes bleed even more since the formatting didn't take to the new forum very well, but I hope to have a better-looking version available shortly.