Othaglot and Cane - Story Thread

dogscoff · #1 October 2nd, 2002, 06:57 PM

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You are forgetting to add the links to the new chapters on the main page, btw. Right now you have to go into chapter 8 and & use the 'next chapter' link to get to 9 and 10.

Thanks Baron. Fixed now.

dogscoff · #2 October 5th, 2002, 02:38 AM

Dammit I hate it when I do three Posts in a row, especially in my own thread! It makes me look like a right sad muppet.

I've just finished writing chapter 11, but I won't be posting it now because it's late and I'm too tired to put it into HTML.

Anyway, there are things I'd like your opinions about:
-Early in the story ppl said that Othaglot was useless and Cane was doing all the clever stuff. Has that been turned around now? I want it to swing back and forth.

- Did Cane's "Pretend Diplomat" revelation make you lose respect for him? Did you even notice it? Does he seem more like a rounded character now he has a few weaknesses?

-Is there too much emphasis on "background knowledge?"

- Is there anything at all in the story that's confusing or nonsensical or unrealistic?

It's really hard for me to read the story myself and answer these questions, but if I can get some answers from you lot I'm sure I'll be able to make the story a good one. I'd really appreciate it if anyone who has read it so far could comment on the above points.

Thanks very much.

[ October 05, 2002, 01:53: Message edited by: dogscoff ]

Suicide Junkie · #3 October 5th, 2002, 04:55 AM

Here's to breaking up chains of self-replying!

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-Early in the story ppl said that Othaglot was useless and Cane was doing all the clever stuff. Has that been turned around now? I want it to swing back and forth.

Definitely. Now that he's back in his element (police work, interrogating criminals), Othy's doing quite well.

It's almost as if they've switched bodies

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-Is there too much emphasis on "background knowledge?"

Seems fine to me. The background needed for the plot points comes pretty naturally, and seems fairly obvious in hindsight.

dogscoff · #4 October 5th, 2002, 04:28 PM

Thanks S_J. Excuse my self-pitying whinges back there.

Chapter 11 is up. It's all gonna get a bit sinister now...

dogscoff · #5 October 7th, 2002, 11:47 PM

Chapter 12 is up. Maybe I'll save some of the sinisterness for later.

Here's a link for anyone too lazy to go find it=-)

Rollo · #6 October 8th, 2002, 12:00 AM

Woohooo!

dogscoff · #7 October 15th, 2002, 08:18 PM

Chapter 13 is up.