The Liberation of Tamarr

Raging Deadstar · #1 June 8th, 2003, 09:36 PM

Bump

Come on guys, one opinion on the Last chapter, thats all i'm asking

dogscoff · #2 June 9th, 2003, 10:49 AM

Enjoying it thouroghly, especially the planetside action - I always enjoy descriptions of alien planets and cultures, and yours is particularly vivd.

As for the intel attack: Yeah, good stuff. THere are a few writing-style things I noticed, but I assume you're looking more for comment on the story. I like the way you've focussed on one of SE4's less prominent aspects (intel) - more ppl shoould do this.

I have to say the whole story is kind of scattered - I get the feeling you didn't plan it much, or that you didn't stick to the plans you made. You're pulling it back together though, so I'll just shut up and keep reading=-)

Ragnarok · #3 June 9th, 2003, 05:40 PM

I'll post feedback on the story when I read it later today.

I'll just edit this post to do it as well.

Ok, well I read the two new chapters. I would have to say nice job RD! I certainly like the action you have going and how everything is developing. Everyone else covered the other areas that I thought of so I will leave it at that. Nice job once again.

[ June 09, 2003, 20:03: Message edited by: Ragnarok ]

Stone Mill · #4 June 9th, 2003, 08:44 PM

As usual, nice work! Vivid.

I do agree that the scope of your tale seems somewhat grand... I like to hear that you are tying things back in that you originally introduced.
I'll be patient of course.

Out of curiousity, do you have an idea about the size of your story? For instance, would you classify it best as a short story, novellette, grand tale, etc.? Or are you writing this more from a free flow as the ideas come to you to paint the picture, and are uncertain about the scope as of yet?

Raging Deadstar · #5 June 9th, 2003, 09:42 PM

Well i have some plot ideas but those are for later on. I'm currently just writing events from the Last year of Tamarrian space travel. Now that i have the new main character introduced things will become a little more organised i assure you

I only put the intel sabotage in just for a little twist

As for size i have a feeling it could end up being a long story, and i have a lot of spare time coming up so i can see this story growing to be more than a Short Story!

Thanks for the feedback, and dogscoff, any criticisms are welcome!

Erax · #6 June 9th, 2003, 09:43 PM

I finally found the time to read your story. Good going RD, I like your descriptions. Am curious to see how this will turn out.